The prompt I chose for my assignment was ‘what do you mean you are leaving?’ This story had a limit of 2200 words. I was excited about this assignment as I could expand on a story because of the word length. In the search for what to write, I went through a few ideas. Finally, I decided to use my personal experience of writing a novel and getting it published.
Looking at the feedback from the last assignment, I was determined to give more description within the story. When I had improved the description and senses, I received compliments such as ‘tangible and realistic’. It was also nice to see my dialogue had improved as I’d cut down on the use of “speech tags.” Such as, said, says or argued.
The setting in the story was good in parts but should include more observational detail, expanding the external world of the story. What I used well in the story was action and sensation. For example, ‘dry mouth; the pacing; the dash to the kitchen’. These are known as a “living moment”.
However, during this assignment I discovered from the feedback, I was shifting from present to past, which would not help the flow of the story. I also used clichés like ‘emotionally drained’ and ‘let the news sink in.’ Although, I disagreed with this because clichés are apart of the real world. When writing, sometimes using these everyday terms such as clichés can’t be helped. You want your character to come across as more real. I haven’t come across any person who doesn’t use a cliché every now and then. Although, I was starting to realise editing my work might involve more than just writing the story.
Finally, I did pass the assignment but looking back, I could have improved the story. This also was a hard lesson in taking on board critical feedback in order to achieve better.
Next week assignment three…